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Rarity is a unicorn from PonyVille, she owns a boutique called Carousel Boutique. She makes her own fashions, and the most loveliest at that. She works her tail off trying to make sure everything is perfect, to impress her role model Photo Finish. She has tried so many different styles but none seem to work. She uses all sorts of different threads, needles, and sewing machines... but the results are always the same. Rarity finally had enough and decided to ask a friend to help her with new fashions, hoping that one of them has the potential to create something absolutely AMAZING.

She invites over all her friends, but still NONE of them could help good enough to impress Photo Finish. She forgot to invite one last friend, possibly the one with the most creativity. Pinkie Pie. The little pink pony hopped in full of excitement and laughter. "Miss Pinkie, I need your help." Rarity asked Pinkie. Pinkie didn't wait long to reply, "Oh what is it? I'll do anything for a friend!" Rarity turned around and sighed, hoping this would be the winning design. "Well," she said. "I need help designing a new dress. Would you like to help?" Pinkie was still hopping up and down as she nodded her head furiously.

Rarity and Pinkie went into the sewing room and got some paper and began designing. Pinkie was making crazy different outfits no one has probably ever seen. Rarity couldn't focus and kept sketching outfits she had already made before. Rarity became frustrated and sat down, waiting for Pinkie to finish. About thirty minutes later, Pinkie had created the most crazy, fun, and boisterous dress probably ever made. Rarity was really determined this time and was rushing to start working on the new outfit.

Rarity gathered all her materials and began. She got a large piece of felt, and started off from there. Pinkie watched her, and ate a cupcake at the same time. Rarity had become so focused on sewing, she couldn't hear anything around her, or even acknowledge what was going on. About five hours later, the dress was finished. Rarity thought that there was NO WAY Photo Finish would reject this one.

She and Pinkie both walked through Ponyville looking for Photo Finish. There was no sight of her. Rarity was about to give up, when she saw Photo Finish. She ran up to her, and told her she had a new dress. Photo Finish refused to come, "Darling, you have failed me too much. No more." Rarity begged, for she knew that this one would surely make it. Photo Finish finally agreed to come, and they all walked back to the Boutique.

When they got there, Rarity pushed the two back into the Sewing Room. She pulled out the large dress. It was a light pink, with a white poof in the back. It had confetti all over it, and ribbon wrapped around it. A large bow was attached to where the neck is, and the shoes were mix-matched pink and white with flowers on the tips of where the hooves go. Photo Finish walked around it, and admired it. Then, shook her head. "Not enough oomph." She said. Rarity screamed and suddenly thought of an idea. "Miss Finish, could you come back in about a week, and I promise I will have a dress you'll love."

Rarity invited all her friends over to help her complete her new idea for this big dress. When they got there, Rarity offered them each a cupcake, which these Pinkie had given her when she first arrived earlier. All of them ate the cupcakes and passed out. Rarity before had turned Pinkie's cupcakes into soporific filled goodies. Rarity carried each of the mares into a dark room and tied them to large leather chairs.

Before the unicorn, Twilight Sparkle, woke up Rarity cut the mares horn off and threw it in a large pot. About thirty minutes later, each of the ponies had regained consciousness. Rarity had a table set up around them filled with tools of all sorts. All the ponies were freaking out, and when Twilight tried to free them using magic, she realized her horn was gone and started struggling to free herself.

Rarity first went up to Fluttershy with a large knife, and started cutting off her wings. The little mare was in so much pain, she couldn't speak. She then cut her open, and began removing everything inside her. The other mares watched as there friend was being killed. Rarity then took the knife and cut Fluttershy open. She removed the organs, and scratched all the meat off the bone slowly. She realized this was going to take a while, and the others might bother her work. So she took a drugged soporific shot, and injected them with it to get them to fall asleep.

After removing everything from the body, she cleaned the hide, and removed the hair, skull, eyeballs, and etc. She threw all the meat scraps away, and cleaning the bones and kept them in a tin bucket. She then started working on the dresses, and many days later, she finished. She used the bones for jewelery, the hide for the unique fabric.

When Rarity finished everything, she had two days before Photo Finish came. She buried all the parts that weren't used, and put the dress in her basement. In no time at all, ponies started wondering where the five went. They searched, they buried, and they did everything they could. Police Ponies started questioning everypony in all of Equestria if they knew anything. Rarity realized, her time was limited, she had no choice but to try to escape.

She put the dress in a bag and headed off. "Rarity where are you going?" Asked a pony out of nowhere. Rarity turned around quickly and walked towards her.

~W.I.P. I am fixing it, many people have been critiquing me about it so I'm making it better~

"I absolutely love this design Rarity!"


THE END.
:iconpakochan:
EVERYPONY LISTEN UP!!!
I do not own My Little Pony, and if this Fanfiction disturbed or harmed you in anyway.
If you have never seen My Little Pony, its not like this XD
This is simply a story I created-
And this isn't the worst. Have you seen Cupcakes?
But like I said, if I affended you in ANY way, I apologize.
It has similarities to Cupcakes. :3
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:icondarkknightmatt:
Mood: Optimism ~DarkKnightMatt Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is an good read... but sadly, not enough oomph. Half kidding of course lol...

The beginning and middle made the story interesting to latch onto it, but the ending, hate to say was TOO swift. I can tell you made a decent attempt to add a little Cupcake flare to it, but it looks more like a crumb. :/ Also, three hours to knock out, skin, gut and purify the hides for a dress, even with magic, is a little... unbelievable. Having more details to it like after two disappeared, the others became suspicious and towards the last pony, more likely Pinkie Pie or Applejack, put up a little more resistance almost as if 'the attacks might end now' kind of effect.

One good reference, just saying, for a corrupted Rarity too is the one from the Lil' Miss Rarity web comic. I did unintentionally use a reference from that series, but I do hope it helps a little. ^^'

And i hope my review isn't too harsh too... if it was >.>' sorry if it was.
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Mood: Big Grin ~PakoChan Aug 20, 2012  Student General Artist
It wasn't! Thanks for telling me though.
I realized while I was making the story I rushed into things, so I'm changing it up a bit and planning it more, so It is better. But I appreciate the criticism and will work to make it better. :3
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~DarkKnightMatt Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, I'm glad I could assist. ^^
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:icondjthebat:
well i read somthing worse than this its called a new dress but if you read it its alot worse
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~PakoChan Aug 18, 2012  Student General Artist
As in gore?

Gosh... I feel like deleting this fanfiction.

No pony is complementing...

Ah well I might read it lol
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~Crystallyna Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
. A . ;;


..

> A > ;;


I think I'll just...

You know..

Leave now and....

Forget I was ever here.....
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Mood: Bewildered ~PakoChan Aug 16, 2012  Student General Artist
lol Was it... that bad..?
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~Crystallyna Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Uhh.

Well..

I never imagines Rarity to be someone to do this. > u > ;;

Then again I never imagined Pinkie to be like she was in Cupcakes either.
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Mood: Pleased ~PakoChan Aug 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Haha. I was in the mood for something gory, and sewing was killing me at the moment, so why not make a fanfiction?

This is like a relation to cupcakes... In certain ways.

And the really bloody fanfictions are usually the most popular, so why not try?

I actually really love Rarity and the others, I was just doing it for appeal^^

XDDDDDDDDDDD
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